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Old 02-20-2013, 07:16 PM   #1
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Lineart Risie the Nomads

well this post contains concept art of a neutral character in the the game im working on.their not evil or good but creatures of pure instinct.they roam the lands searching for food and shelter.their lands is being destroyed by humans for pretty much the same means.but the humans use magic and tact to accomplish the latter.hope you like.all crits welcome.



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Old 02-22-2013, 05:28 PM   #2
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Color Art Roaming nomad game concept art

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Old 02-23-2013, 03:13 AM   #3
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I wish this was sarcasm, but this is the best art you've posted in a long time.

We could give you much beter advice if you actually told us what you were doing. What software you plan on using, what will the game be like, what you want to focus on? Every decision influences all the others.
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Old 02-23-2013, 03:42 PM   #4
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Where is the artwork?
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Old 02-24-2013, 06:44 PM   #5
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oops sorry it got deleted here it is.shes a antagonist from my game,a dark elf priestess,who is the poor queens right hand woman.shes not done i plan on adding shadows and such tommorow,hope you like.oh its back to vector.



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Old 02-24-2013, 10:41 PM   #6
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wow, where do I start? She has no personality whatsoever, you don't push the design enough, I'm not sure if she's supposed to be wearing stockings, she's completely stiff and lifeless. you need to go back to basics and study anatomy and look at how other people design their characters that make them look appealing. here I did a paintover hopefully it'll show you how you can improve, it's got nothing to do with your style but the design choices you're making and your lack of the fundamentals.

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Old 02-25-2013, 08:00 AM   #7
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thanx astrapho for your comments,heres some more concept art,its in brown for some reason,just sketches of her.



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Old 02-25-2013, 07:23 PM   #8
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Ok, well from the sketches they look like they already have a pre-disposition towards evil due to the eyes. also all the horn like things coming from their backs/shoulders, try to vary the size and width, make them different and if they're indigenous take a few nods from native tribes in Real life, using parts of their body to accesorize. Peircings or things hanging from the horns. The clawed feet seem less than ideal for any creature that spends time on the ground, you won't see anything like that on land creatures, i understand the need and freedom of creating new creatures but give the people something to associate it with, people do it unconsciously so if something has traits of a bug they think and associate it with a bug and how it lives and moves, keep that in mind. Work on muscle tone and identifying which muscles should be developed, you know what your drawing and what your working on so don't hesitate to just throw it out there, you can always tone things down but if you hold back from the beggining your design will never reach what it could be.

Look forward to seeing how this fleshes out and hope this helps.
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Old 02-26-2013, 08:58 AM   #9
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Thanx Aegis yeah they do look scary but their neutral.You gave me some great crits,Ill put them to use in my next sketch.Oh I love the poachers,great concept.Kind of like succubi,but different,very kewl.
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Old 02-28-2013, 02:02 PM   #10
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Lineart more risie concept art

well im trying to break down the risie into village functions depicted here is a male and female warrior or hunter and a female gatherer.the female warrior is more buff than the female gatherer,and so on.im going to look more closely at apes for further anatomy issues.hope you guys like,



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Hey dude dope design.

I would strongly suggest working more on anatomy and life drawing because your proportions and anatomy is off. I do like the design though
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Old 02-28-2013, 08:45 PM   #12
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I think the character is cool, but I agree with astrapho. go and do more anatomy studies and look at art of books and search through blogs to see how people tackle concepting.

in your current sketches her proportions are off and her anatomy is off. take a loot at these blogs for inspiration and to see how others do it

http://characterdesignnotes.blogspot...heets-101.html

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Old 03-01-2013, 06:37 PM   #13
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Lineart Risie redux

well guys heres a cleaner and more anatomically correct version of the risie race from my game wip.the games going to be a 2d rpg in the vain of ultima.ofcourse i have allot to do before i can claim the same status.Mandelak helped allot with the turn around.the risie kindof look like apes so i used gorilla reference.hope you games like and crit,lol please be kind this is my first time using a reference thanx in advance.



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alright, better than the last one. your anatomy is something you have to get down and really practice i think it will make your art better overall. Your side profile view is skewed, not really from the side and you don't get a good picture of the legs/feet or hands due to lack of detail. Extremeties are very important that can show more feeling than the face can in a picture. Still you took the crit, improved and redesigned the creature. Taking criticism and actually listening to it is more key than anything. I see some improvement but till you get your basics down i think your progress is gonna be rough.
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Get Hellboy 2. Watch the Troll Market sequence. Profit.
Word. No idea why it's underrated even though it's best comic based movie up to date.
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Old 03-06-2013, 05:53 PM   #17
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hey guys heres the wip for the game i told you about just a early design of the poor queens son,he has a crush on the main protagonist Wisper.Yes hes evil but he wasnt always. his mother has him under a spell,he kills who she wants.When he comes in contact with Wisper he remembers his good side.




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lol i love that scene,ill watch it for sure,thanx guys.
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thanx for your review guys i have problems with proportions,trying to get better.thanx again.
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thanx man lol some times i cant really see what im drawing.i did this late at night,lol it gets worst when its dark.yeah their way off.go check out my new drawing its better.
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