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Old 09-09-2006, 07:13 AM   #1
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Color Art combat girl finished.

finished her today, the colouring doesnt look to great but im happy wid the lines (first time useing the pen tool for lines). you can see the original in the work in progress. crits please

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Old 09-09-2006, 01:47 PM   #2
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You know i can remember commenting on your very first post, and i think in regards to art we're quite similar, you just have more confidence than me .

The only thing I can say is that the coloring is very flat, i'm not really an expert at it myself so maybe get some help from the more experienced members.

It's just great see someone grow from the very beggining.

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Old 09-09-2006, 03:10 PM   #3
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thanks,yeah i no my colouring sucks but thats somethign im trying 2 improve, iv had alot of comments saying my stuffs 2 flat i guess ill just have 2 keep practiceing.btw good to no some ones got there eye on me
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Old 09-10-2006, 12:11 PM   #4
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sorry to spam my own thread, but has any one else got any crits on this.. how i could improve on my next peice..im kinda stuck, dunno what i should try and improve on next time drawing wise...
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Old 09-10-2006, 01:21 PM   #5
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make this one bigger i cant realy see it
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Old 09-10-2006, 02:04 PM   #6
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ok, here you go...

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Old 09-10-2006, 02:55 PM   #7
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sorry to spam my own thread, but has any one else got any crits on this.. how i could improve on my next peice..im kinda stuck, dunno what i should try and improve on next time drawing wise...
Basically there isn't a lot of variation in the shadows you use it's all one flat color, and it seems that you aren't picking where the light source would be coming from so it looks like your just dumping in random shading... phew again ( i've said this to some one else today)
there are some great tutorials on coloring on the forum and the PK site, have a look at them for hints and tips if you need them.
Basically all you can do is take on board peoples advice and practice, practice practice!!! keep at it and you'll get there in the end.
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Old 09-10-2006, 03:02 PM   #8
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it looks like your just dumping in random shading
you got that right lol, im gonna spend more time on my next colouring and check a few tuts out, prolly could do with looking up some colour theory 2.. ty

EDIT: The cat in your avy looks like mine except cuter..and less fat!!
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Old 09-10-2006, 07:33 PM   #9
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her eyes are a bit to big and wats that line in her neck?
also i dont understand why ppl are afraid to give woman lips?
a line is not a lip lol
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Old 09-11-2006, 03:17 AM   #10
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it needs a lil more shading

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Old 09-11-2006, 03:27 AM   #11
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Next picture you do I want to see Xtreme™ shading. And pick a light source

If you go to the far extremes you'll get a good idea where to put the highlights and shadows, and then you can pull them back to something more plausible
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Old 09-11-2006, 09:05 AM   #12
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ok...ill do an extreme shade next, the lines on the neck supposed 2 b the the muscles or wateva in the neck, next time ill do them with colour as they are way to defined. as for the lips...i dont see why i shouldnt do just a line....thats just how i wanted to do it, i dont see that as an error...eyes agen..i like to do em big, there alot smaller than some of my previous posts cuyz i dwecided to tone em down a bit, sorry if it seems liek im blameing alot of the face on style its just....i no human eyes and lips dnt look like that i just wanted em to :p
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sounds a bit like excuses...
i can understand stylistic art but in order to have ur style u hav to hav some sort of knowledge of anatomy
her head is to small for those eyes so it looks very odd
u can claim style all u want but its still not gonna be right
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Old 09-12-2006, 07:30 AM   #14
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You need some practice on drawing human heads. Shape, detail, and placement are somthing you need to look over :P Shouldn't be too hard, references and tutorials can be found anywhere, look for a bunch of them. Mixing techniques may help you develope as an artist. The anatomy is off as well, just look at females :P the torso on this one looks more masculine and feminine. This may be culprit to your coloring, it seems flat with a few random shadows. Don't forget to add lights! every surface, even a black surface should show evidence of light, it'll bring alot more depth to your picture ^__^
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Old 09-12-2006, 07:49 AM   #15
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not bad , but , starting from the obvious , she looks way too masculine for a girl, her neck is wide , which gives her a "macho" look.
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Old 09-12-2006, 09:20 AM   #16
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ok guys thanks for teh crits, both shadeing and folds confuse me a bit. any 1 no of any good tutorials for eaitehr of them?
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ok guys thanks for teh crits, both shadeing and folds confuse me a bit. any 1 no of any good tutorials for eaitehr of them?
Honestly has anyone on this forum ever used the PK tutorials except me????
N but honestly they are fantastic especially the coloring and fold tuts. I cant use the coloring on becaus eI use Open Canvas but it's really easy to follow.

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The Physics of folds
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Old 09-12-2006, 10:31 AM   #18
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So , you haven't even took a glance at what i said , ok nevermind.
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Old 09-12-2006, 10:39 AM   #19
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....ok if you say so urban......

EDIT: Ty original for teh links
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