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Old 03-05-2015, 04:58 PM   #1
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I'm trying to push myself and I've actually used a reference!
now the thing is. . . When I finish gray scale, I will color it. However I'm quite uneducated in color theory, values etc but I try to understand it as much as I can, I think this is going to be the best piece I've made so far I would love a critique so I can make it even better!
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Old 03-05-2015, 05:32 PM   #2
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Looks good cant wait to see where this one goes!I like the subtle water and scarf.
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Old 03-05-2015, 08:57 PM   #3
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Can't say I see anything majorly wrong with it.

A few nitpicks:

- Her upper hand looks a bit stiff and/or odd.
- Her pouches and gear are defined entirely through lines, which usually is a sign that they're not distinct enough value-wise.
- You've got the direct lighting from the moon (sun?) down. But consider that water is a reflective surface, and will reflect (somewhat less) light up to the bottom of her leg as well.

This already looks like a promising improvement over your previous piece. Keep it up!
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I think I've finished gray scale part, I couldn't get the hand right so I got rid of it (I really tried, re-drew it at least 6 times haha). I hope the coloring will turn out okay!
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Old 03-13-2015, 02:41 PM   #5
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Have I ruined it or is it okay?

If there is anything to correct, please let me know
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Old 03-14-2015, 09:27 AM   #6
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IT'S RUINED FOREVER!

...just kidding, it looks great so far. Nice color choice, the warms offset what would otherwise be a very cold image.

Reflections aren't really reflecting properly though. The moon's reflection is too small and too high, and the mountains are missing altogether. Remember, at these flat angles water acts almost like a mirror reflecting everything above the horizon line.
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IT'S RUINED FOREVER!

...just kidding, it looks great so far. Nice color choice, the warms offset what would otherwise be a very cold image.

Reflections aren't really reflecting properly though. The moon's reflection is too small and too high, and the mountains are missing altogether. Remember, at these flat angles water acts almost like a mirror reflecting everything above the horizon line.
Haha Thank you!

I'll keep that in mind next time I'll do water!
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I really like the way you did the scarf, and I like the boots laying next to her. I like little details like that.
Her left foot looks like it might be broken, though. The way the knee and shin look, they seem like they're going straight down. If so, then the foot would also be flat on the rock, or if it had any tilt to it, it wouldn't be as pronounced.
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I really like the way you did the scarf, and I like the boots laying next to her. I like little details like that.
Her left foot looks like it might be broken, though. The way the knee and shin look, they seem like they're going straight down. If so, then the foot would also be flat on the rock, or if it had any tilt to it, it wouldn't be as pronounced.
Thank you for pointing it out!
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A technique that might be helpful (directly from James Gurney) - find a barbie or mannequin or whatever and put it in that pose with a dish of water for the pond and a lamp for the moon. Take a picture or two for ref. That will help with getting reflections & what not. Just remember that a camera only has 5-10 stops of light while the eye has something like 25, so you'll need to under/over expose your camera shots.

Other than her left foot that looks oddly twisted, I really dig this. Great job!
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A technique that might be helpful (directly from James Gurney) - find a barbie or mannequin or whatever and put it in that pose with a dish of water for the pond and a lamp for the moon. Take a picture or two for ref. That will help with getting reflections & what not. Just remember that a camera only has 5-10 stops of light while the eye has something like 25, so you'll need to under/over expose your camera shots.

Other than her left foot that looks oddly twisted, I really dig this. Great job!
Thank you for the tip! I will consider doing this
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