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Old 02-20-2014, 07:18 AM   #1
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Color Art Tree Face 1

For lack of anything catchy, I'm starting a series of these tree face people.
The idea is that one day we will all return to nature. So, I'm showing a transformation/decomposition to a tree-like, skeletal-like state.

Drawings will vary in intensity, some like this and others more extremely deformed. I want to make them beautiful and haunting at the same time.
9x12 toned tan paper. Pencils and white chalk pencil for the highlights. Lots of tortillion use. Photo doesn't do it justice. I'll try to get better pics next time. P.S. My loving wife let me use her photo as reference What a gal, letting me destroy her face.





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Old 02-23-2014, 06:00 AM   #2
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How many light sources are there? It seems a bit ambiguous in spots. It mostly seems to be coming from the top left, but the cast shadow from her nose kind of contradicts that.

Her eye socket should probably be shifted over and be a bit larger. Generally the edge of the wings of the nose will line up with side of the eye and the edge of the mouth will line up about with the center.

Also, eye lids have a bit of thickness to them, you can convey that by showing the top edge of the bottom lid and the bottom edge of the top lid. This also helps show the roundness of the eyeball by showing how the eyelids wrap around it.



I like the concept. The rendering and details are great. I love pencil drawings on toned paper.
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Old 02-25-2014, 04:58 AM   #3
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Jeco: Well realistically speaking the eyelids sag if there's no bulb behind them, and they hang straight instead of bulging, so the eyesocket is actually too large. .
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Old 02-25-2014, 06:39 AM   #4
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I agree with the crit about the eyelid jeco, but I don't think the eye socket thing should be so technical. I know it's realistic, but there isn't necessarily an anatomically correct skull beneath the roots/transforming area. Technically, the hole is wider and extends to the 3 little holes to the right of it.

Thanks for the crits, got another one planned in photoshop and ready to draw.
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Old 02-25-2014, 07:42 PM   #5
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Awesome ! I must bow to the master of details! lol I like the roots by her eye the best.Keep up the good work.
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Old 03-05-2014, 05:30 PM   #6
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I kind of wanted a tree ring pattern in the socket like bark regrowing over a cut branch, if only because the dark socket is a really dark value compared to everything else.

Very nice detail though.
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Old 03-08-2014, 10:13 AM   #7
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The details are beautifully done. Is the brightness on the left edge of the image part of the drawing or is that due to the light source during photographing?

I love the concept. I can't wait to see more.
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