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Old 10-22-2007, 04:39 AM   #1
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hey there pk haven posted much round here in a dam while anyway.. did this not too long ago now this was bout an hour or so just quickly sketched then inked on my way home and a straight scan in.... so many things wrong.. anatomy!! i really was just trying to capture a expression of pain, haha duno if i did or not?
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Old 10-22-2007, 12:14 PM   #2
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aaactually, he looks kinda constepated... I say: make his eyes squintier, show some sweat or tear... aand if I was in that much pain, I would'nt be looking up (even if I did heal 2 seconds later O_o)

[EDIT] Heres a quickie for you so u see wat I mean:

{EDIT.... again :3} the quickies' a few posts down...
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Old 10-22-2007, 12:16 PM   #3
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actually flako i would do the opposite - make his eyes wider and pupilssmaller so its like a shocked kinda pain and i say keep the head where it is
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Old 10-22-2007, 12:22 PM   #4
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....maybe we all have our own take on pain -.- ? (not meant in a sarcastic or rude way btw)
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Old 10-22-2007, 12:30 PM   #5
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Personally, if I was in pain, I'd be trying to gut the sod who did it.
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Old 10-22-2007, 12:35 PM   #6
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lol yeah i suppose you should draw him sketching or thinking up ways for his revenge xD
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Old 10-22-2007, 12:46 PM   #7
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Heres a fusion of my and milkyway's recomendation...



The ear seemed a little high so I shortened it a little...
Curved his teeth and lips a little to show more emotion...
oooooo.. foamy mouth and tears....

[edit] ...just noticed the ear should be futher back on the head.. not so close to eye.
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that looks much much much better im glad you went with my reccomendation ^^ he looks frozen with pain good job =3
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Old 10-22-2007, 02:13 PM   #9
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I'm not sure about gritted teeth. What is the expression we're after, resistance, shocking pain, Angry yet in pain?

Till then i'm not so sure.

Pose, my guess its a little too straight. Surely he would be bent backwards/forwards depending on the force of the impact.
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Old 10-22-2007, 02:18 PM   #10
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well surely it depnds HOW he get the huge pole stuck in him
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...he came on a little too strong for Jean?
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hey guys thanks for taking the time crit
well il firstly start with the type of pain i was looking for.. it was more in pain but angry and resisting.. can i have all three? haha
I mean its wolverine hes always angry and sort the fact he has to brace him self to push(hence gritted teeth) the pole/tentacle thing out.. tentacle u ask? i say that cause i wanted to put omega red in there.. but i duno i wasn bothered at the time anyway wish i had now seeing tho i didn explain what was really going on in the 1st place u cant really get a grasp of what i was doing sorry bout that..
Then again actions speak louder than words so i guess i didn get what i was trying to achieve ..yea to me personally i wouldn have done big eyes just for the fact that hes not really in shock and wolverine does not cry! haha and hes trying to get the bastard thing out haha.. hey but i actually really like the expression u gave flako maybe u could give it go?
oh and johnway yea your totally correct about his torso position as well anyway at the end of the day im learning and you guys help with that so thanks alot..
he came on a little too strong for jean..HAHA awesome!
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