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Forum: Writer's Forum 04-23-2008, 02:06 AM
Replies: 427
Views: 48,536
Posted By Haephasto
Subjects

Finding something to write about is rather easy, actually. There's tons of stuff happening in this world and in all our lives (whooo, I just used "our" to signify all mankind!). There's plenty of...
Forum: Writer's Forum 05-29-2007, 02:58 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,548
Posted By Haephasto
Some recommended changes

All right, I believe the poem has potential, although I will not get into my usual crusade about structure and opposing free verse.

I changed some of the punctuation, added capitol letters where I...
Forum: Writer's Forum 04-16-2007, 03:53 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,708
Posted By Haephasto
Stuff

It seems to me your story has the potential to be original enough to be interesting, yet not becoming too unconvincing. You might want to be careful in expressing each of the brothers' motivations,...
Forum: Writer's Forum 03-05-2007, 09:51 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,708
Posted By Haephasto
Questions

Well, I think your outline is not really that detailed, but perhaps that's because of the forum post.

I wonder how many pages you roughly take for a single chapter, and how much of the events you...
Forum: Writer's Forum 02-28-2007, 12:32 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 1,200
Posted By Haephasto
Let me not to the marriage of the minds

Where in the world did you get an idea like that? Not all artists suffer and certainly not always.

As for the poetry, and the author has posted in more topics. I read them all. I find myself...
Forum: Writer's Forum 01-08-2007, 01:18 PM
Replies: 39
Views: 2,674
Posted By Haephasto
A minor note

I'm afraid I simply HAVE to comment here. You voice an opinion here that you appear to advocate strongly. I must remind you, however, that most established writers in literature DO describe...
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-21-2006, 04:12 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 1,275
Posted By Haephasto
Some feedback

I find that the lines are somewhat suitable if brought in rapid pace, but the formatting you use in the beginning is something that I find makes it difficult to follow.
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-21-2006, 04:06 PM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,223
Posted By Haephasto
Response

Again, my face brightens (bright red to be precise) with such kind remarks.

You could try the OED (Old English Dictionary), it's the best source for Old and Middle English spellings, because it...
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-18-2006, 04:55 PM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,223
Posted By Haephasto
The words of old

Thank you, I feel honored to receive such flattering words, though I must admit that my knowledge is far from what it could be :) My studies of English language and culture involved only a single...
Forum: Art Critique 11-08-2006, 09:48 AM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,359
Posted By Haephasto
Very nicely done. The only remark I can make is...

Very nicely done.

The only remark I can make is that the front foot (left for the viewer) seems a bit odd to me.
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-08-2006, 09:35 AM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,223
Posted By Haephasto
Smoldering Ashes

And to the fires of Hell you shall bow, and the scourge of mankind be your master now, no more shall the light shine upon you, you shall know pain and torment without relief.

Yes, it doesn't make...
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-07-2006, 10:16 AM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,223
Posted By Haephasto
Oh?

I fail to see how being a good speaker and writer has anything to do with having sound logic. As a matter of fact, logic often has very little to do with whether or not you are a good speaker.
A...
Forum: Art Critique 11-06-2006, 04:36 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 1,073
Posted By Haephasto
Yes

I actually rather like the genericness of your characters...all of them.
I'd wager if you'd have some well-written jokes in there, you could have yourself a fine webcomic by using these generians!
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-06-2006, 04:11 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 1,272
Posted By Haephasto
A technical question

Could you tell me what metre and form you picked?
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-06-2006, 04:09 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,818
Posted By Haephasto
Aye

I couldn't agree more.

The Imp of the Perverse, actually.

And while you're at it, read The Tell-Tale Heart, The Raven (a poem) and The Cask of Amontillado.

And for more indepth on good versus...
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-06-2006, 04:02 PM
Replies: 28
Views: 3,381
Posted By Haephasto
Characters

I disagree. Characters alone cannot make a good story. To me, a story consist of a balance between character development, events and description.

The last point, description, consists entirely of...
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-03-2006, 05:18 AM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,223
Posted By Haephasto
Feedback

I find that the prompt is rather biased, because it assumes that you agree with his use of logic, or at least find it "sound."

This leads me to the question: what level is the course you are...
Forum: Writer's Forum 11-03-2006, 04:56 AM
Replies: 28
Views: 3,381
Posted By Haephasto
I do

I have a bunch of stories and poems, and a novel which is approximately 135 pages (a4) long right now.

I notice, however, that working on a story is basically the same as working anywhere: it is...
Forum: Writer's Forum 07-05-2006, 09:46 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 1,133
Posted By Haephasto
Response

Actually, a poem needs not necessarily be something true. If you write about the terrible state of the world, you need not be an activist or something.

However, this poem is not particularly well...
Forum: Writer's Forum 05-08-2006, 12:41 PM
Replies: 77
Views: 6,027
Posted By Haephasto
Reply

As well you should be scolded! If anything can destroy a good story or poem, it is poor grammar.
Forum: Writer's Forum 05-05-2006, 07:53 AM
Replies: 77
Views: 6,027
Posted By Haephasto
Clarify

I mean that the difference is that in spokem poems, you do not "see" the structure before you.

That makes for a huge difference in both meaning and understanding of the poem. And since you started...
Forum: Writer's Forum 05-05-2006, 03:27 AM
Replies: 77
Views: 6,027
Posted By Haephasto
Question

A question i had:

Are your poems meant to be read aloud or to be read as they are written down?
Forum: Writer's Forum 03-19-2006, 04:53 PM
Replies: 77
Views: 6,027
Posted By Haephasto
Response to your next

Note the adjustments. I suggest these things from a more emotional point of view, because it seems to me that - though improvement there is - you still don't have a way to capture the feeling in a...
Forum: Writer's Forum 03-15-2006, 04:55 PM
Replies: 77
Views: 6,027
Posted By Haephasto
Response

First off, let me say that I am not a fan of free verse. That being said,

I think your work lacks a certain something. All it has is darkness. There is nothing new, nothing unusual, no imagery...
Forum: Sketchbooks 01-09-2006, 03:10 PM
Replies: 118
Views: 39,343
Posted By Haephasto
Vwala

I daresay your material is awesome, if a tad unoriginal.
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